Heyo people, big things!
I’ve finally gotten around to rewriting some of the first chapters of Technomancer! (6-20 with a few small changes to others)
Not fully rewriting though. A lot of the already written words were just moved around and added to, and the general outcome of the earlier chapters is the same, but there is a lot of new content (around 8k words added) that I believe makes the start more solid, and does a better job of making the first loop feel more satisfying.
That said, I understand it is a lot of content, and quite a few small changes across other chapters that haven’t changed much, so I’m going to do a few breakdowns of the changes here so you can get the important bits if you don’t want to go back and reread. This will also give you an idea of which chapters to reread if you still plan on it (I advise any labelled “Large edits”, the small edits can all be gotten from here without losing too much).
Oh, yeah, and some of them have had their titles changed… The old ones just didn’t quite fit anymore.
Also, I've changed the tagline of the novel because the old one made it seem a little too much like revenge was the novel's focus. Which, I hope you'll have realised if you've read this far, it's not.
Expand for my changelog (no spoilers behind this tag, there’s others blocking if you just want to use this to work out which chapters to reread)!:
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Chapter 7 (Small edits):
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Added a few small lines to bring in the death of Emily’s parents sooner since it will now be relevant for the next few chapters:
“AAHH,“ Emily lets out a scream in shock before quickly covering her mouth, Herber’s fallen form overlapping with the long-suppressed image of her parents bleeding out in front of her.
Not again.
Her heart drops, her breath catching in her throat as panic threatens to overwhelm her.
“Tsk,” Diego clicks his tongue. ”Miguel, Jose, capture her for questioning.”
No, the watch can turn back time, it’s fine, Dad will be fine. I can do something this time!
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Chapter 8 (Small edits):
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Same as the last, along with having her realise the danger Anna’s in and focus on it sooner:
“I- I’m fine,” she sniffles. “I just fell asleep at my desk and had a nightmare about you dying. When the thunder woke me up, I thought I’d lost you too for a second.”
Herber flinches slightly at her choice of words, releasing a sad sigh as he strokes her hair and holds her tight.
“Don’t worry Emi, I’m not going anywhere anytime soon,” he comforts her.
That’s right, I’m not letting them take you. I won’t lose another family.
Emily’s sadness slowly fades into indignant anger. She separates from Herber after a few more seconds and smiles at him.
“Sorry about that, I’ll be fine now, it’s just a bad dream.”
“No worries kid. Just call me if you need anything, okay? Even if it’s just another hug. Me and your sister will always be there for you, no matter what.”
Emily flinches as a new thought forms in her mind.
Anna. I have to protect her too.
“Haaa,” she sighs and sits down as Herber leaves the room. She pulls over a clean sheet of paper. “Right, how can I actually fix this?”
Amazing plan to save my family!
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Chapter 9 - Futility (Title change, large edits):
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Made some small changes to the start for correction on the power of spells and physical improvements because I didn’t have as solid an idea when I started writing:
Her split second of indecision costs her dearly, as Carlos spots her and dives towards Diego with surprising speed, throwing the knife from within his robes and yelling:
While doing so she fails to notice the faint murmuring coming from Jose, only realising her mistake as a bolt of ice tears clean through her left thigh.
Then added a bit more on her reactions to Herber’s deaths relating to her parents deaths:
Emily grits her teeth, overwhelmed by a feeling of revulsion as she is unable to look away from the revolting display of power due to the pressure holding her in place. The choking feeling of helplessness wrenches free the locked away memories of her parents’ demise, their mangled corpses flashing across Emily’s mind as she returns to the past once more.
Tick! Tick! Tick!
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Emily chokes back a sob as time resets, repressed pain tearing strips from her heart as new trauma settles on top. She hits the desk and stands up, using her anger to force the unwanted images from her thoughts.
Added small changes to show psychological aftereffects between loops:
I can’t give them time to cast spells. Diego can use some form of rock spikes, which will do some serious damage if I'm caught by one, if that icicle is anything to go by.
She rubs her thigh, the pain still fresh on her mind as if it actually happened.
Added 2.2k words to the end of the chapter for a few extra loops, the entire story changes in order for the next few chapters. Here’s a quick synopsis of what happens in this one, but I suggest its worth reading this yourself:
After failing to beat the Mandrago mages and watching Miguel use sacrifice to heal Diego’s wounds, Emily resets and tries again. She decides to keep The Clock in her pocket after all and to commit to the surprise attack to try get rid of them. She fails her first attempt after killing Carlos, then getting caught off guard by Diego’s physical strength and the resilience of Jose and Miguel (survive a crossbow to the chest and a hand cannon shot to the gut).
The next attempt, she creates a makeshift single barrel gun and sets it up with her hand cannon to use both her available bullets with a single string-pull, utilising her advantage of knowing exactly where the mages will move when entering the room to target their hearts. She kills Carlos and Miguel instantly, firing a crossbow bolt into Jose’s throat this time to disable him, then moves into a melee to kill Diego and finish off Jose.
Herber comes in to check on the gunfire, finding Emily stood over four dead mages (two with their throats ripped out) and freaks out a little, questioning: “What have you done?”. Emily doesn’t get a chance to respond, as the city is swallowed by the Mandrago Patriarch’s spell and, almost instantly, his presence locks onto Emily. She get’s her hand to The Clock right before a spell locks her in place and she’s dragged out of the shop to face the Patriarch. He questions who she works for before killing Herber when he tries to claim Emily works for him. Emily manages to slip out of his hold enough to activate The Clock, but realises she can’t beat him in a fight, and he’ll come if she kills the other mages.
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Chapter 10 - Behind Enemy Lines (Title change, large edits):
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Changed the start add a few new loops attempting to hide from the Mandrago mages:
She tries destroying mana crystals nearby to create distractions, hoping they’ll mask her awakening to no avail. Then she tries running from the shop with the crystals and waiting until after the Mandrago’s come looking for her. They slaughter everyone on the street and she comes back to find them before resetting.
Deleted everything after 1k words later and moved the first visit to the mandrago estate (short synopsis of connecting bridge):
Emily resets time and convinces Herber not to come into the shopfront so she can speak with the mages alone.
When talking to them, Emily argues that Herber and Anna aren’t actually her family since she’s adopted, so they don’t need to: “take responsibility for the crimes of their family” like Diego argued. Saying this hurts Emily, but it seems to work, since Diego agrees to let her come without touching Herber and Anna. Emily doubts it, but follows him back to the Mandrago estate. The chapter ends as the first brainwashing finishes.
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Chapter 11 - Diminishing Returns (Title change, full rewrite):
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This entire chapter covers some sections extracted from other chapters, and a large amount of new content. Short synopsis:
Emily once again gets ordered to give Diego The Clock immediately after the brainwashing is finished. However, this time Emily has experienced the Patriarch’s strength and refuses to interact with him without the safety blanket, so she resets.
She repeats the attempt but doesn’t let them see her holding The Clock. They enter and face the Patriarch, Diego immediately introduces Emily as the daughter of a clockmaker from the city who stole mana crystals from them. The Patriarch uses a spell to choke Emily while asking Diego about her family, and upon hearing they’re fine, asks for both Herber and Anna to be killed to send a message not to steal from them.
Emily resets again, but starts looking for a way to save either of her family members, notices that if they execute Herber immediately, they don’t seem to feel the need to attack Anna as well. Tries another confrontation with Diego, this time letting him kill Herber, and when asking to not burn his body, she specifically says: “His grave will leave a reminder for people not to make the same mistake as me” to try say Diego. He agrees, and when speaking to the Patriarch this time, he claims to have killed Herber but left Anna with the body to spread the word of what happens when people steal from them. The Patriarch is satisfied with the outcome, asking for a servant to be sent to leave a mark (a scar) on Anna’s face as well so she’ll act as a living reminder of what happens when you mess with them.
Emily resets again, now knowing a way to save Anna at least, and tells Herber about everything. After convincing him magic and time travel are real, she questions if it’s possible to get smuggled out as one last hope, but Herber shuts it down saying the city will be alerted if they are missing from their home when the nobles come looking for them (and Emily knows the Patriarch will act himself if needed to locate them quickly). Emily accepts that Herber has to die and resets again for proper final goodbye. Chapter ends with Emily making sandwiches alone.
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Chapter 12 - Resolution (Title change, content added from other chapters, mostly old words though):
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A few things have been tweaked for continuity with new events, but this chapter just covers Emily’s final confrontation with Diego’s group. Anna actually watches Herber’s death from the kitchen now, and Emily sees her crying over his body as she leaves but doesn’t say anything out of guilt.
The rest of the conversation with the Patriarch after deciding her family’s fate plays out, then Emily’s sent to the room she’ll be staying in.
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Chapter 13 (Small edits but important edits):
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Edited to add memories of Herber dying to Mandrago Patriarch:
“Dad… he… it’s okay, he didn’t end up like…. That!” She shivers and forces back the images of Herber mangled by spikes of rock, or splattered on the floor in a pile of gore, that intrude unwanted on her mind.
Added small changes to show a little more Emily’s forceful emotional control:
“Haaa.” Letting out a deep breath, her eyes flit open with a glint of steel that fades as she glances down at her still-naked form.
Fleshed out Emily watching the time tick past Herber’s death and her emotional shutdown and habits of distraction coming into full effect:
Emily remains in her trance for another three hours, dropping it the moment she feels a familiar emptiness at her core. Instantly, she switches to meditation, which she stays in for a while before opening her eyes and pulling out The Clock to check it: 8:15.
Dad died at 8:16.
She sits in silence, sadness swirling in her gaze as the seconds tick down.
Tick! Tick! Tick!
8:16.
Her chest tightens and her hand starts to shake as flashes of Herber dripping with blood, or drenched in it, fill her mind.
Tick! Tick! Tick!
She resists the urge to press the button. To see his face one more time.
Tick! Tick! Tick!
8:17.
A string in Emily’s heart snaps, as she is consumed by panic.
Should I have reset again? Could I have saved him? Was there something I didn’t think of? Something I didn’t try?
Then she remembers the Patriarch and the overwhelming power he wields.
Dad’s fate was already sealed the moment I stole those magic crystals. It was already too late by the time I made The Clock. The only choice I had was who else died too.
Hoping that’s true, she feels a single tear roll down her cheek as ice washes through her veins, the memories of Herber’s demise sinking into the depths of her mind. She sits perfectly still, staring at the ticking pocket watch for three more minutes before she hears a knock at her door. She shuts her eyes and takes a slow breath, before turning to the door and calling for the maids to enter.
This time they are carrying another set of plain clothes and a fresh towel, along with her dinner. Emily thanks them as they leave, dropping The Clock back into her pocket before forcing herself to chew her meal, barely aware of what she is eating. She turns her mind to magic to distract from the chilling void within, determined to learn enough magic to exact her revenge.
It looks like I won’t be able to learn enough runes to form a spell quickly.
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Chapter 14 (Small but important edits):
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Added Emily trying to get a message to Anna:
She notices a merchant she recognises in the docks before they leave, and resets time to write a note to pass to him to give to Anna:
Dear Anna,
I’m sorry I left like I did. I wish I could explain and apologise to you properly, but I don’t have the words to convey my message on paper.
I know you’re hurting, but you’re strong. I know you’ll get back up again and keep going.
I promise I’m not abandoning you. I’ll be back within three years, and I’ll explain everything then.
I love you so much. Never forget that.
Love, Emi. Your sister forever and always.
Wrapped in a note for him:
Hello Gregory,
We haven’t spoken before, but I’m Herber Coldstone’s daughter, Emily Coldstone. I can’t currently speak to you, but please could you deliver the enclosed letter to my sister, Anna. She should be at Herber’s shop.
Hand this note to her as well, and she’ll pay you three silvers. (Tell her to use my savings - she’ll know where they’re kept.)
Please nod at me if you agree,
Thanks, Emily
He nods and she boards the ship like usual. (also made small changes to how Anton treats Jose, now more businesslike)
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Chapter 15 (Small edits):
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Added a small note to show Anton held caution towards Emily:
“Yes, my father was a clockmaker before the Mandragos claimed me, and I learned a bit from him,” she answers with a wistful smile, noticing some of the tension in Anton’s shoulders slip away.
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Chapter 16 (Small edits):
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Added a small note to show Anton (airship captain) and Angela that Emily got along with were vocally against nobles:
Angela and Anton the most, becoming friendly with the two due to their easy-going natures and poorly veiled distaste for nobility.
Added note of other attacks to mention of sand stalker attacks:
Emily shivers at the thought, remembering hiding from sand stalkers when she was seven and they entered the slums, and other assaults from worse beasts she’d rather not remember. She’ll never forget the feeling of helplessness as she listened to, and watched, children and adults alike being ripped apart after failing to escape their clutches.
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Chapter 17 (Small edits):
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Added small notes to show that Emily was cautious towards Juliana:
“Nice to meet you, I’m Juliana Madonna and I’ve been sent to welcome you into The Covenant.”
Emily quickly regains her wits, a cautious glint flashing in her eye unseen.
Not a Mandrago? Does she work with them? Or is she unrelated and here and sent by The Covenant?
Without pause, she returns the greeting with a bow of her own.
“I’m Emily Coldstone of house Mandrago. What house are you from?”
“Madonna!” Juliana says with a smile as she grabs Emily’s free hand and pulls her along. “Let’s go. If we hurry, we should be able to catch the next train!”
Not a Mandrago then.
She seems awfully proud of kidnapping and brainwashing people. No, actually I don’t know if all families do that, maybe I just met a particularly shitty one. She seems too innocent to be bragging about that. Then again, there’s no guarantee she knows even if her family does brainwash people…
“I see…” Emily sighs, pressing her doubts down and not letting them show on her face while asking with a sly smile: “Also, weren’t we meant to be racing to catch a train?”
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Chapter 18 (Small edits):
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Added small notes to show that Emily was cautious towards Juliana:
“Oh, take room B53! I’m in B51 so we’d be neighbours!” Juliana exclaims, sparking an internal debate for Emily.
Why does she want to stay close? Is she really just very friendly, or have the Mandrago family sent someone to keep tabs on me? Hmm, I don’t think they’d feel the need: they seemed very confident in their mental magic... Ah well, I’ll see where this goes for now. It’s not like I’ll show her anything I need to hide from the Mandragos.
“Sure, I’ll have room B53 then please.”
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Chapter 19 (Small edits):
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Added to internal anger about Herber to include Patriarch:
I guess I only really want to kill the Patriarch, that bastard Diego, and his goons. They’re the ones that actually killed Da-
Emily is pulled out of her thoughts by a light squeeze on her hand, which had begun shaking without her realising.
“Hey, are you okay? You look like you want to murder someone,” Juliana asks nervously, with clear concern written on her face.
Emily takes a deep breath to calm herself, forcing the thoughts of Herber’s demise back down, then responds with a light smile.
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Chapter 20 (Small edits):
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Showing Emily losing caution towards Juliana:
“No problem! I’m glad I picked up the mission. It's not every day you get to earn points and make a new friend. You wanna get dinner together later?”
So she was here for a mission?
A little more of Emily’s remaining caution slips away as she responds.
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Chapter 26 (Small edits):
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Added notes to show the last of Emily’s caution for Juliana fading:
After a couple of seconds scribbling, Jenny hands back the notebook with a dozen noble families written down. Reading over the list, Emily lets out a small sigh of relief, the last of her caution towards Juliana washing away.
No Madonna family!
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Chapter 38: Tiny continuity fixes.
Not worth noting
Chapter 51: Unrelated to other changes, but fixed an error I noticed when rereading earlier chapters:
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Yeah, I asked a few weeks ago in enchanting,” Emily answers eagerly. “It’s a supermassive array under The Dome that was set up when The Covenant was created. It fulfils three major functions, the first is one you already know, confusing unawakened people that try to get close to The Dome and turning them around. I assume it’s some form of illusion, like the training room enemies. The second is cleaning the city, an extra function requested by the royal family to keep their capital looking nice and shiny. The last is tracking. The array detects all movement within the mist and especially flags mana signatures to help spot any mages trying to infiltrate the city. It’s got to be an incredible array; I wish I could go see it.”
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Emily closes her eyes again but pauses before diving back into the Spellweave.
Since this is only pushing mana to my cortex for experimenting on known spells, please tell me this works. Sub-cores, learn all first circle spells using the Spellweave.
Instantly, three of her four cores buzz to life and mana and machina pour into her cortex before spreading throughout her entire system as her expanded mental processing net starts tearing through her command. While her cores follow her instructions, Emily watches her mana level slowly decrease.
It’s a drain, but it's only small.
Splitting her thoughts in two directions completely, in a manner that feels alien yet all too natural to her at the same time, she uses one thread in her primary core to watch her mana level and internal flow, and the other three to restart The Technomancer’s Breath that stopped when she gave her cores a new command. The mana that rushes into her body from the surrounding array instantly overpowers the drain of her skill, filling her reserves and slowly expanding them.
Woah! My meditation technique wasn’t upgraded, but it appears my ascension naturally increases my mana intake and generation by a lot.
She smiles happily at the change, basking in the warm embrace of mana. After twenty minutes, the activity in her cores fizzles out. To test the results, Emily raises a hand and thinks of the light spell. In a fraction of a second, a dazzling orb of white light spins into existence in her hand.
“That was fast,” she mutters absentmindedly, feeling an odd sense of connection with the spell as if she’s been casting it daily for years. “Strange. I almost feel as if I could just…”
One of her sub-cores bubbles with mana for a few seconds, before passing three runes to her primary consciousness. Emily bends the light spell’s magic circle, reforming three of its existing runes into the new ones supplied, and with a quick switch of mental image, the orb before her changes. The glowing white is quickly burned from the centre, being replaced by a flickering orb of ethereal orange flames.
Emily excitedly passes her other hand through the flames and feels no heat.
I just changed the element of a utility light spell to a violent element without changing the effect! Does this mean I could heal with fire? Or create light with earth? What are the limits?
As her excitement for the topic grows, one of her cores starts playing in the Spellweave to bring her answers. Emily moves on, leaving the question as a background task, and stands up to test her new strength.
“Let’s do this properly,” she says with glee, walking to the training room’s entrance and leaving. She adjusts the settings before walking back in, finding a wide, empty space with ten mages standing in a line before her. Each mage has a blank set of white robes on, and all of them have a smooth, white, featureless mask in place of a face.
“Disperse!” Emily commands.
The training dummies follow without question, spreading out evenly in the room.
“Activate defensive spells!”
Ten different magic circles appear around the dummies. A multitude of elements are used, from rocky armour to bubbles of fire. Emily starts by pointing at the closest dummy, wrapped in a protective sheen of water. She rapidly casts bolt, forming the magic circle of the spell completely within her own circles. The spell tears a line through space towards the dummy, ripping through the second circle defensive spell with relative ease.
Internal casting of second circle spells, check.
The training dummy disintegrates into particles, surprising Emily a little.
“It still had enough power to destroy one of these?” she mutters incredulously, lining up her hand with another dummy and sending a burning lance of fire into it.
The flaming lance bursts against the stone armour covering the dummy, ripping the rock together in the process and shredding the dummy with rocks and fire.
I see. Increasing my mana purity and density even makes weaker spells drastically stronger.
“Line up and stack barriers!” she orders the dummies, planning for one last magical test.
Emily stands before the line of dummies, each providing some form of large-scale cover to protect themselves from her. She closes her eyes for a moment, drawing on a carefully refined mental image: produced after hours of research into the bows still used with terrifying lethality in the Lerus Isles.
A massive circle is carved into the floor around her, burning its way into the world in an orange-and-white glow, the white far more pronounced than with Emily’s normal fire spells. The circle quickly fills with runes, before they leap from the ground, drawing blazing arcs as a complicated matrix of movement wraps around her. A shining white bow of light forms in the air before Emily, condensing till it appears as a milky-white crystal, with a blisteringly bright arrow of orange fire nocked and ready to shoot.
Emily feels her mana draining, close to a thousand points flowing into the spell as the bow slowly draws back and the centre of the arrow forms a glistening white core of molten metal and light.
“Blazing Arrow of Light!” Emily announces proudly as the circle bursts with power and the tension in the taut bow’s limbs is released.
Even with her enhanced reactions and eyesight, Emily struggles to follow the motion of the arrow as it flies out of the bow, releasing a cracking sound as it tears through the air and impacts the first barrier within an instant. Meeting little resistance, the arrow burns through the first barrier of fire, punching a hole clean through the torso of the dummy behind as it continues its flight. The arrow draws a line of burning light, tearing a path through every barrier in its way and only dying out as it buries itself into the chest of the seventh dummy.
“Seven barriers in one go!” Emily mutters happily.
Though some of them were poor matches. Those fire barriers would have put up no resistance. Also, it took far too long to cast. I need to learn some real third circle spells. It's a shame that I can’t cast a second circle ritual spell with internal casting though. Why is that?
She begins casting the spell again, watching the circle being carved into the floor around her once again as she considers.
Ritual spells work by temporarily manifesting an array, turning the ground or air around you into a conduit to hold a large amount of mana, more than a normal mage at that level can handle in one go.
Emily’s mana flows quickly into the magic circle from the new, unstable circle around her heart.
I see, since I’m using more mana in one go than second circle spells would allow, I can’t hold the spell in two circles. They don’t have enough mana throughput to build up or discharge that large an amount of mana at once, causing the spell to become unstable.
She cancels her casting and lets the spell fizzle out around her with a hint of disappointment in her eyes.
That’s a shame. I’m probably going to have to get rid of burning arrow after spending so long on it... Maybe I can remake a third circle version?
Emily takes a deep breath, releasing it slowly to calm her racing thoughts, still slightly adjusting to her once again increased processing speed from the ascension.
Four threads on each core, and each thread is more powerful. I’m going to have to start consciously matching my processing speed properly to the world around me. Wait. Am I?
She pauses for a moment, quickly building a plan in her mind and confirming the validity based on her new instinctual understanding of her cortex. She shuts her eyes, drawing her focus inwards and picturing her cortex as four orbs of light forming in her blank mindscape, each orb representing one of her four cores. One of the orbs quivers before elongating into a shining humanoid form, and Emily’s perception joins to the form smoothly.
She looks down at the form’s glowing hands, gazing closer and seeing a small network of neurons, all sparking with light.
Good. This should make things easier. Though it uses two threads on my main core to maintain such a detailed rendering.
She reaches out for the core managing Technomancer’s Breath’s passive use, drawing it into primary focus in the space and splitting it apart into four separate nets of light.
First, we need one thread to maintain the energy circulation. I don’t need one for maintaining the breathing anymore: my body seems to be doing that naturally now. Then one of these threads will be designated to manage the other cores’ workflow. Next, one of these threads will manage the primary consciousness’s perception: limiting the current thread use based on processing demand or danger. It should keep me running at normal human speeds unless I’m actively trying to work something out quickly, or engage full assistive processing with all cores if I’m in danger.
The gaze of her virtual form falls on the final thread within this core.
Let’s link this thread to that one. This last thread will constantly watch my magical senses for threats and oddities in my surroundings and alert me if needed. This core will be designated the control core and will remain on these tasks unless needed in combat.
As she finalises her choices and releases the core to return to the view of all three, she sees the other two cores kicking into motion, both working on different projects within the Spellweave.
Good, now my cores should be getting utilised properly in downtime. For now, I’ll use them all as much as possible. But in the future, if it's needed, I can set the control core to manage a rotating sleep schedule to keep me permanently awake.
Emily opens her eyes, leaving her mindscape and returning to a view of the training room.
Right, one last test before I leave here.
She pulls out The Clock, staring at the seconds hand ticking by.
Full assistive processing.
The seconds hand stops. Emily watches it, counting seconds in her own perception as she waits. Three seconds later, the hand moves.
It has only increased by a little. I guess I’ll need a lot more cores to make it seem like time’s standing still. Return to designated tasks.
Time returns to normal, and Emily tucks The Clock back into her breast pocket. She turns towards the door and strides out of the training room.
“Let’s go surprise Jules,” she mutters with a grin.
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Unfortunately, when Emily returns to the dorms, Juliana is absent. Shrugging off her disappointment, she enters her room and decides to take a shower while she waits for Juliana to return.
She strips out of her equipment and enters the bathroom, freezing as she sees herself in the mirror.
Was my skin always that smooth?
She leans into the mirror, looking closely at her face. Her skin is pale and smooth, without a single imperfection or visible blemish.
My acne scars are gone. Wait, my scars!
Eyes widening in a moment of panic, Emily’s gaze falls on her exposed torso. Instantly, she sees the scars tracing her form. Running her eyes down from the small jagged line across her shoulder, a gift left by Jeremy and Kyle’s attack, to the particularly pronounced mark from her left hip to her belly button, a record of a particularly close encounter with a knife-wielding adult in the slums, she lets out a sigh of relief.
“Good,” she mutters, rubbing her fingers fondly over the cut.
Taking a step back, Emily strips off completely, taking in her current state with a critical eye. Her skin is completely smooth and blemish free all over, the only signs of the life she’s lived being the scars and calluses that remain. Even the light hairs covering her body have vanished, leaving her smooth to the touch. Her muscles are taut and well defined, and her face and proportions, while hard for her to judge, seem to have changed as well.
Is my ascension improving my body aesthetically as well? Is that intentional or just a side effect? I’d lean towards intentional, since my freckles are missing but my scars remain. If it was a side effect, I would have thought it would remove scars first. Instead, it’s like it got rid of the bits I didn’t like, but kept those I do. Either way, I’m certainly happy with the changes.
With a small grin, Emily stops admiring herself and climbs into the shower. She takes her time, enjoying the warm water washing over her body. After climbing out and drying off, she hears a three-beat knock at the door. She throws on a shirt and underwear before opening the door for Juliana.
Juliana pulls her into an immediate hug, but as she pulls away to look at Emily, a small frown creases her brow. Emily keeps a neutral face, tilting her head in confusion as Juliana leans in to look closely at her.
“What’s wrong? You don’t think I’m pretty anymore?” she asks in a teasing tone.
“Ha,” Juliana scoffs, narrowing her eyes. “If anything you’re even prettier. What did you do?”
Emily’s lips part into a sly grin as she releases her mana, letting it flow freely from her body. Pressure crackles in the air around them, revealing the power hidden within Emily’s robust frame. Juliana’s eyes open wide in disbelief.
“I reached third circle,” Emily says, snapping Juliana out of her shock.
“Congratulations!” she cheers with glee, pulling Emily into a kiss.
Emily giggles after they separate, pulling Juliana further into her room and away from the door.
“Wait, was that thunderclap you then?” Juliana asks, dropping into Emily’s lap on her bed.
“Yes. My ascensions seem to cause a commotion when they happen. Do you think there’ll be any trouble?”
“Probably not. It was weird that a magical effect like that managed to penetrate The Dome, but I would have shrugged it off if your ascension didn’t happen to line up with it. Anyway, what’s your plan now then? You’ve been waiting for this for a while, right?” Juliana asks while relaxing into her chest.
“Yeah,” Emily nods, running her hand through Juliana’s hair. “I have a deal I made with Agnes that I need to follow through on first. Then, I’m gonna plan another expedition into The Glade.”
Juliana’s grip tightens at her response. Emily sighs, reassuringly patting her girlfriend’s head. They sit in silence for a few minutes until Juliana speaks again.
“I’m coming with you.”
Emily starts slightly at the statement, surprised by the firm certainty in Juliana’s tone.
“Are you sure?” Emily asks, leaning back slightly to look at her face.
“Mm huh.” Juliana nods, looking up at Emily with tears in her eyes. “You’re going to be leaving afterwards, aren’t you?”
“Ah,” Emily’s words catch in her throat, the sadness and resolve in Juliana’s gaze driving a wedge into her heart.
“Haaa,” Emily lets out a deep sigh, dropping her head to rest on her girlfriend’s shoulder. “You knew?”
“Of course I did,” Juliana says, running her hand through Emily’s hair as tears roll down her cheeks.
“I’m sorry,” Emily whispers, unable to hold back her own tears.
And they've finally started speaking about Emily leaving!
Big sad, but this next arc in The Glade again will see them talking it out properly several times.
I'm currently getting close to the end of this arc in the new content I'm writing, and it's looking like Emily will be finishing her time in The Dome by chapter 120 if you're interested.
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